Lauren
30/9/2012
Cleaning is important. A state of room affect your work. The room was mess, your mind was mess too. To prevent these situation, you should clean your room. There are three effective ways of cleaning the room.
The first way is throwing away things you do not use. If you don't use it at least 3 months, it means it doesn't useful item for you. We called these things rubbish. Usually rubbish is offender of your mess room. People thought a moment that they need rubbish is coming, but that moment never come. Those are just exist in their room occupying big space.
The second way is using boxes. Boxes will help you organizing items. Use one box by one item group. Using boxes means grouping item. For example papers, small stationary or electronic equipment. If items were organized, you can find the item you need more easy than before so you can save your time.
The third way is placing it back where they belong after you use them. It is precaution that will prevent room to be mess and keep your room clean. It prevent that put your room out of order.
All these three ways of cleaning the room improve your work efficiency. Also keeping clean is good for your health and change your feeling to work.
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ReplyDeleteHi Lauren, I enjoyed your writing.
ReplyDeleteBut there are some mistakes.
One is in 1st paragraph, 1st sentence, "If the roon was mess" is better than "The room was mess".
Also, in the 1st sentene, verb mistakes are existed.
I think that "A state of room affect your work" is changed into "A state of room affects your work".
Except these things, I sympathize with your writing.
Because, my room is unclean. In my room, there are so many things. So these three things are what I have to do. Especaily, The third way is very helpful for me. That's because, among many things in my room, almost things that I do not used.
I will try doing these three things.
Thank you!
Lauren,
ReplyDelete1. Check your articles
2. state your main points IN your thesis
3. pay attention to singular and plural - sometimes you have them confused.
good organization and content though...you may want to add some supporting details.