Sophie
30/9/2012
Three Ways of Watching Movies
These days many people enjoy movies. There are a variety of movies. People choose and watch movies what they want to watch. There are three good ways of watching movies. People can watch movies in a theater, by downloading on a legal site and by buying DVD.
The first way is watching movies in a theater. People use this way when they want to enjoy a movie with people. They watch movies with their friends, or date with their girlfriend or boyfriend in a theater. People who want to watch a movie in a theater need going to a theater and choosing a movie which they want to watch. It is a little expensive, but it is a general way to watch a movie.
The second way is watching movies by downloading on legal sites. People use this way when they want to enjoy a movie conveniently. This way is fast and cheap. In this case, all people need for watching a movie are joining to be a member of the legal sites and login, then downloading what they want to watch. People can watch an old movie which wasreleased in the past and which they already watched in a theater , but want to enjoy it again.
The third way is watching movies by buying DVD. People use this way when they want to possess a favorite movie. If they buy DVD, they can enjoy behind stories in the DVD. This way is also convenient but a little expensive. All people need to do are buying at a DVD shop the DVD and turn on the computer then put on the DVD.
All three ways of watching movies are useful if people use them in the appropriate situations. Now days people live very busy lives. Usually they watch movies in a theater, but they also like to watch movies in their home conveniently by downloading and buying DVD.
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ReplyDeleteHi, sophie! I'm sook. Did you enjoy your Cheseok?
ReplyDeleteNot for me.. I was really busy for doing my assignment. Anyway, thanks for commenting my essay.
Now, let me tell you about your essay.
It's very useful imformation us like me who really like enjoying movie.
But, I think there are something you should rethink about it.
First, I can't understand the meaning of paragraph 3, 2~4 line's sentences.
Second, in paragrahp 4 "All people need to do are buying at a DVD shop the DVD and turn on the computer then put on the DVD." I think you should check one more time about verbs.
And also how about changing the order of "the DVD" and "at a DVD shop"? I think it's more better
Last, in last paragraph, what do you want to intend using "Now days"? Nowadays? I didn't understand it.
There are some wonders but your essay is very good.
The structure is really certain to read.
I hope you enjoying the remained holiday.
See you this thursday!
Sophie - very good essay. Sook - very good comments. I agree with almost everything Sook said. Your structure/organization is very good and easy to follow.
ReplyDeleteSome of your compound sentences are not quite right and some of your relative pronouns are not quite right.
Review P1 S3, P2 S4, for example.
Also, your thesis is split into two sentences. See if you can combine them into one :)